Talk:The Hundred-Day Siege

An interesting story so far. You have the makings of a fine tale. A few notes though. Your character has a name that is almost too familiar with Argel Tal of the Word Beaers, the leader ofthe Gal Vorbak. Secondly Space Marines are trained to have no fear in the face of monstrous opponents. I doubt that meeting a superior officer for the first time would make a Marine nervous, especially one that is being groomed for a captaincy himself. Lastly the way the sergeant spoke about Magnus probably crosses a line. You have to remember that the Primarchs are pretty much royalty, especially to their Legions. Making such an irreverent comment about a Primarch to one of their Legionnaires would usually be taken as a insult, and maybe one serious enough to demand a duel. If the sergeant and Toth were familiar and friendly with one another that would be one thing, but they just met. The Sergeants comment would almost certainly be viewed as discourteous. I am your master! At your service. (talk) 06:03, May 5, 2014 (UTC)