Talk:Craftworld of the Isha'glo'meck

It's nice to see another Craftworld on the site. However, as an Eldar fan and an avid writer I can't help but notice a few mistakes.


 * 1) The name. It has to change to something more suitably 'Eldar-ish': Cyrse or Ulthwe sound like Eldar names- 'Warp-closers' does not. I suggest you look at Celtic festivals and look for one that could be warped into being the name of a Craftworld (as both Saim-Hann and Biel-tan are corrupted names of Celtic festivals). I would suggest the name  Lugh-Nasd Craftworld, which is a warped version of the Celtic summer festival of Lughnasadh.
 * 2) Formatting, you need to capitalise the word Craftworld when ever it is used. And the spaces between commas should only be this: I, do; not I, do. The space should only be after the comma not before. You also need to put capitals at the beginning of each word in headings (with the exception of "the", "in", "on" and "of"- unless these words are at the beginning of the heading in which case they must be capitalised) otherwise they look a bit wrong. Words such as Infinity Circuit should be capitalised as well.
 * 3) You need to brush up on some of your spelling. Just run the article through a spell checker once and a while (but never change 40k specific words if it indicates to).
 * 4) Quotes. Please indicate that some lines are spoke by other characters/races. Dey tinks dem pointy eared humi-likes is pansies an' dat 'ealing is fer snotlings. Makes no sense on it's own. Wheras: "Dey tinks dem pointy eared humies is pansies an' dat 'ealing is fer snotlings."

- A common Ork view of the Craftworld does. It is all about context. Other than that it is an interesting idea for a Craftworld. A Shadow Before the Dawn My Talk 13:39, June 28, 2011 (UTC)