Board Thread:Critique and Advice/@comment-26120744-20161213032546

Hey everyone.

I'm kind of a noob at writing lore, but I've been hard at work with a rewrite of all my Chaos lore, starting with the pages regarding the Dark Apostle, Azunar, and his Warband, the Abyssal Sons.

Azunar: http://warhammer40kfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Azunar

Warband: http://warhammer40kfanon.wikia.com/wiki/The_Consecrated?action=edit&section=5

I'm going to change the page name later.

Both the pages are still under construction, but I don't think I'm exactly the best at this, so I'm open to any advice. I'm trying to make a real "Crusader" Chaos faction, like Chaos Black Templars.

If you have any comments or advice that would seem harsh, try to give it to me gently, but straight. Thanks. 