Board Thread:Critique and Advice/@comment-5940646-20170508124649

Hey all. Just wanted to post this to show two new articles I've made. The first is a new story; The Mad Angel. It shows Mikial Arch's first encounter with one of Samael's Chosen, a member of the Ordo Angelus Chapter under the effect of their unique Black Rage. It's the origin story for the chapter master that I started doing ages ago, but forgot about. Hope it's interesting, and that it gives you a view of the chapter's beliefs.

The second article is the Chronal Guardians Chapter, or as they can also be called, TARDIS marines. They defend the time-stream of the 40k universe, making sure everything happens on track and correctly. While it would be nice to gain some feedback on the article, I also want to explain how they can be used in your own story writing. The chapter seeks out any temporal threat, sending either a lone marine to deal with it, or a couple companies. When your own stories begin using time travel, the Guardians can be used as enemies, observers, or allies. They have worked alongside the Inquisition, but they would work along side Dark Eldar if it meant keeping the time line flowing properly.

I've already created some characters for the chapter, whom you may recognise, but you can feel free to create your own as long as you follow some rules;
 * The chapter never uses technology above the kind available in the current time period, so no 401st millennium armour around the time of the Heresy. The exceptions to the rule are listed on the page.
 * The chapter is a secret. Few outside the Inquisition know about them, and they are Astartes with experience. Normal humans have their minds wiped after dealing with the chapter.
 * They are not chatty. They may let stuff slip, but on purpose.
 * They were not active during the Heresy. Just before or after is fine, but from the Triumph at Ullanor to the end of the Siege of Terra, no Tardis Marines. They are also appearing less in the Dark Millennium, but are still secretly active.
 * The First Company, the Oncoming Storm, only ever attacks threats capable to damaging the time stream intentionally, such as powerful demons. The rest of the time, they don't appear.
 * No scouts, apart from McFly. Part of the mystery.
 * Please don't go explaing them. Although they are fair use, I want to keep some control over the chapter, and that includes their true backstory and such.

I feel like that's a bit long, but anyway. Over details are on the chapter's page. If you don;t want to use the chapter, that is fine. I just think its a cool idea that everyone could use. Thanks for reading, sorry if your a bit weirded out, feedback for both articles welcome, and have fun! Dragon out. 