Talk:Iron Sentinels

I can see you put some work in on this one. However I feel compelled to point out a few issues. For the most part you don't have too many canon issues. The single biggest issue you have are the vehicles. No Chapter founded after the Horus Heresy has any business having that many crusade era vehicel. Having one or two would be something. Furthermore it's been outright stated that no Chapter outside those that participated in the Great Crusade have Javelins. That is sadly NCF. I would scale back on all the Relic vehicles.

The other issue I would like to bring up is the part about their First Company Veterans going around and adventuring whenever they like. Something you have to keep in mind about Warhammer 40k is that Space Travel is not as easy and convenient as in other settings, and in order to go off on an adventure these Veterans would have to be given a ship from the fleet, which is no small thing. Plus the Chapter would not simply allow it's most powerful and respected warriors to go running off whenever they liked. What if they had need of them?

The next issue I feel the need to point out is with their notoriety and their recruitment. To start out with a Chapter that prioritized protexcting the citezens of the Imperium would probably be very well known, not less. After all the survivors would likely tell of the Marines valor, no? Next I doubt any Codex Compliant Chapter would recruit memberas from all over the IMperium. They have a Homeworld which would be able to provide more than enough recruits for a standard Chapter, plus you have them recruiting from the other worlds in their system. They have no need to go so far afield for more troops, and no Chapter is so famous that they draw troops from the breadth of the entire Imperium.

Beyond these there are a few things that I find aren't necessarily breaches of Canon, but are in bad taste. The first is the name dropping. You have them very intimately invovlved with a number of notable Canon Chapters. I know this seems like it would raise their profile, but it actually hurts it since it gives the impression that those famous chapters are needed just to make this one seem interesting. The biggest one was their involvement on Baal. The Blood Angles aren't going to give rewards and become even firendlier with a Chapter just because they showed up after the battle was over. Plus the bit about the Iron Sentinels that were present being deemed more ferocious than Death Company Marines was a bit outrageous. Finally it's said in the article that the Captain of the 8th Company is the "Most enthusiastic Marine in the universe". Really? Come on. That's a bit of an outrageous claim.

In general these guys suffer from a case of the Mary Sues and a slight lack of identity. However that doesn't mean this is a bad article so to speak. With some polishing it could be perfectly fine. If you need any help with that I would be happy to offer my services. I am your master! At your service. (talk) 08:13, May 16, 2015 (UTC)