Talk:Corpse Wolves

Critique
Icestormshadow,

After proofreading your article over the last couple of days and giving it a thorough read-through on more than once occasion, I've taken some notes and will now offer some suggestions on how to make this article much better.

Okay..where to begin...


 * 1) Chapter Name - The name of a Chapter often describes it some way, linking to its Battle-Brothers' essential character or mission. In this case, your Chapter is a supposed Successor of one of the most brutally efficient and vicious genetic lineage around..which are the Space Wolves. I'm sorry, but this doesn't exactly strike fear in the hearts of their enemies when you say it out loud. A more appropriate name might have something to do with a real-life culture from Earth's history. I understand that with the name 'Green Wolves', you have an obvious theme going, that connects them to their particular genetic flaw which seems to turn them into living trees. Which brings me to my next point..
 * 2) Gene-Seed - You mention that your Chapter's gene-seed suffers from a genetic idiosyncrasy which causes it's Space Marines' skin to gradually turn into living wood. Yeah, this isn't feasible with Primaris Chapters, as Archmagos Belisarius Cawl was successful in screening out all known genetic idiosyncrasies within the gene-seed of the First Founding Chapters. In accordance to newly established canon, it states: "Primaris Space Marine gene-seed has only a .001% chance of genetic deviancy from the original baseline with the passage of each generation, which makes it nearly immune to the severe genetic instability suffered by Chapters such as the Blood Angels and Space Wolves over the course of their existence." That means, your gonna have to go back and work on this. If anything, just say your Chapter has the inherited ferocity and lupine traits inherent in the genetic legacy of Russ, since it still has the Canis Helix as the primary trait within it, but that they do not suffer the instability of the 'Curse of the Wulven' like their Progenitors, thanks to the genetic tinkering of Archmagos Cawl. That means NO TREE MARINES.
 * 3) Feelings - You need to elaborate on what these 'Feelings' are. Are they genetic or are they psychic in nature. Are they introduced by the Chapter's Librarians into the minds of the Chapter's Aspirants during their induction process and initial psychic screening? Give us some more explanations...does it have something to do with the Aspirant's true feelings or deepest darkest fears? What are they? How do they work? We need more details...

These were just some of the initial things I think you need to work on to bring this article up to snuff. Hopefully you'll find this critique helpful and will adjust your initial work accordingly that it's more in line with current lore.

Humbly yours,

Algrim Whitefang, WH40K Wiki Senior Associate Administrator  (talk)  04:19, August 16, 2017 (UTC)