Talk:Ox'arcvor

ok got some simple critiques

first is simply a few minor grammer bits that threw off the paragraphs, nothing too major there

but after that i read through thier history and thier biology and society and it was good with exception of a lack of explaining how they came to be as they are now seeing as they are a species of parasitical mind eaters...and thenl i hit their technology.

"Armed with two plasma pistols with ninty percent accuracy up to a thousand meters, or armor piercing blasts at five hundred meters," so they have plasma-pistols that can shoot up to a kilometer (longer range than the tau pulse rifle and more inline with some of the heaviest snipers in 40k), and can cause a explosion up to a range further than a imperial plasmagun can reach.

Also you depict some of these as being piloted automata but that is oximoron as automata means that the device operates independantly of the user.

Allow me a demonstration. This is your body...WITHOUT FIBER! (talk) 06:12, February 24, 2015 (UTC)