Talk:Templars of Steel

So first off - this Chapter wasn't formed as part of a Founding, which is against this Fanon's rules.

Then there's the ludicrous fact that you've tried to expand on a canon Chapter so much in terms of their numbers that they formed their own Chapter. Then if we forget this, bear in mind that the Black Templars - depending on whether or not the sources of this are still canon - number anywhere up to 6,000 Astartes... I doubt that any of their elements are spliting off into their own independant Chapters because they're "Too Large". Compund this with the fact that the Founding is really early... yeah No!!!

What do you mean by "Expositionary fleet"? Ir sounds like something you talk about with redards to poetry rather than about a Crusading Fleet.

Seeking out the true strength of the Tau Empire is far from necessary (not to mention something unlikely to be tasked to a single Chapter at all), and seeking out threats beyond the Imperium seems useless since there are plenty within it to keep them occupied. And why would the Inquisition specifically be involved in this tasking? Seems a bit odd.

Be careful of the use of "Known Galaxy" vs "Known Universe". We are in the Milky Way Galaxy, but said Galaxy is by no means the universe. Also, I think it's fair to say that all of the universe is known, but maybe not explored by the Imperium as we know it in the 41st Millennium - another important distinction.

"Grand High Marshal" sounds like an  attempt to one-up the Black Templars' Chapter Master equivalent. Probably a good idea to change it. And remember: There's nothing wrong with "Chapter Master".

"Inside the Alexandra  Battle Barge" is not a thing. The Battle Barge itself will be the Fortress, meaning that the inclusion of  "Inside the..." is redundant and inaccurate.

The list of allies is a little bit ridiculouse. Take - for example - the Dark Angels and the Blood Angels are on relatively oppositie sides of the Galaxy and the Ultramarines are just as far from both of those Chapters as they are from each other. In other words, your Allies list is ridiculous, especially given the fact that the Chapter has to remain under 1,000 confirmed Astartes and even hinting at numbers close to those maintained by the Black Templars is kinda forbidden.

" Heavy Armored Combat" - What does that mean? How is it done? etc....

There are a number of other errrors I'll get to another time, but yeah... there are plenty. Also, a little originality would be nice. And the shameless use of the Iron Cross has been done before and adds absolutely nothing to your article, not to mention it will piss off those of us who've been on this Wiki for a while.

Brst of luck, IllumiNini (talk) 15:41, June 27, 2017 (UTC)