Talk:Fallen Angel

Looks like you're off to a good start. The first person viewpoint presents a challenge as a writer, but the audience should enjoy it. I'm looking forward to where the story goes. Just make sure to do some good proofreading. Some of the punctuation is incorrect and on a couple occasions you forgot to capitalize a name or proper noun or the word I when referring to the speaker. Probably just a result of typing fast and easily correctable. Ultramarine13 03:15, August 25, 2011 (UTC)