Talk:Red Foxes

I like this articles idea, but I have some critiques. Firstly, try to tone down your descriptions of your chapter and its members. Saying they are one of the most honorable and noble chapters is a very broad statement, since what makes them honorable, and in what way are they honorable, also it makes you sound like you are bragging. Secondly, "Most powerful Chapter Master to date" is a hell of a thing to say, Especially if you take into account the Canon CMs such as Dante of the Blood Angels.

Then their allies and enemies could use some better detail, than just saying their enemies are just anyone who fights mankind. Also for tactics, while space marines can use ambush tactics they don't really excell in it, Super Soldiers in bulky power armor are funny like that. Though striking at flanks can be something they do.

Otherwise the article is fine, just needs some more detail.

Blackdamp (talk) 14:12, October 3, 2014 (UTC)