Board Thread:Critique and Advice/@comment-28169233-20170103130127/@comment-28169233-20170104114729

On the preiview everything below this is a block of text despite it being organized when i typed it, it is not my intention but I cannot fix it, I apologize

Name: Undecided

Badge: Will follow name

Battle Cry: Liber sanguinum, Take my name!"

Founding: 21st

Planet: [DELETED FROM IMPERIAL RECORDS]

Primarch: Sanguinius

Quirks/Traits differentiating from Standard Blood Angels "Codex"/Codex Astartes

Coloration:



Variations:

Sargent: Red Helm

Assault: White Helm

Devastator: Blue Helm

Veteran: Laurel

Culture:

Sanguine Rememberance: Burning an item or a bloodied cloth honors a moment, a courageous act, Burning a person or body honors their entire life, Those who are killed in this way by the chapter have all available information on them recorded in the Tome of Sanguine Remembrance. After a grand achievement the cloth will be burned in a large pyre, telling the story to his squad mates, the scouts, or the chapter, depending on rank or achievement, after it is told, the story is added to the chapters history, the accuracy and scale of these records are held in high regard, to the point that lying or touching up parts of your recounting is a serious offense.Officers will often hold onto cloths that contain the story of grand or inspiring events, and tell them to their squad to boost moral before a particularly lethal assignment-  Librarians: Librarians serve an even greater purpose amongst the chapter, as they work as both librarians in the Astarte's sense, and the traditional one. They tend the chapters grand library, tending to each Tome ensuring it stays in prime condition, as well as solving inconsistencies and purging lies from the records and ensuring the most accurate portrayal of their past is recorded, Another task they have is to choose what events will be taught to new recruits, what lessons are important for them to learn through these stories on their way to becoming true Astartes.- Artifice: Before their involvement with the imperium, the locals of [DELETED FROM IMPERIAL RECORDS] decorated their weapons with depictions of their grandest achievements, the Blood Angels attraction to artifice augmented this practice, Veteran's Bolters are often gilded with abstract or stylized depictions of their grandest kill, or highest personal achievement. The event must first be accurately recounted to a proper collection of battle brothers, and will then be personally scribed into the Chapters History Books, this practice is a grand ceremony when carried out by the Chapter Master, as his achievement must be deemed worthy of recording by every living member of the chapter, who must be in attendance at a grand reciting of the events, the Events may only be told once by the chapter master before being permanently recorded in the chapters history and forged onto his weapon of choice. - Questionable Habits:- Death Company: As any other Chapter descended from the blood angels, the chapter suffers from the red thirst and the black rage, Brothers affected by the black rage are added to the Death Company for as long as they remain usefull. When they black rage fully takes a marine, or a memeber of the death company falls in battle, they are gathered together in a great pile, both living and dead, and set ablaze, flesh bare to the flame. The reason for this is due to the connection the chapter draws between, blood, memories, and fire. To burn something is to free the memories trapped inside of it, and is liberating to burn something attached to terrible memories, and is a common form of stress relief for both initiates and veterans alike. Like most of those who carry the blood of sanguinius, perhaps more than any other line of chapters, they see their primarch as truly second to only the emperor, and their worship of him is almost the core of their being. It is also true that the Sanguinor has appeared in battle to aid blood angels during their most dire of struggles, some see this as a spirit of Sanguinius, still fighting along side his sons. Members of the Death Company, gripped by the black rage see themselves as Sanguinius, The chapter believes that this is in part true, the Death Company's increase in strength when gripped by these memories is as they see it, because a part of sanguinius is trapped in side of each of these marines, and by setting flame to them, can free those memories, and perhaps return Sanguinius to them. -Curse: A distinct overwhelming lack of any vague form of self preservation which is part of what allows them to burn fellow marines alive, and what leads to them seeing an opportunity for a great story, leading to an entire squad abandoning their post as to charge say, the enemy warboss, they can't register danger. -Ordos Hereticus: - The Chapters Homeworld was once on the fringe of Segmentum Ultima, leading to them on several occassions fighting alongside the other chapters located their. Which also lead to several other chapters witnessing their habit for ritualistic burnings of their Death Companies. This Eventually led to the involvement of the Ordos Hereticus, who investigated the matter. No corruption could be detected amungst the chapter, however an example would need to be made to quell their chaotic and unacceptable behavior. After it was learned that this practice originated from their home planet, the punishment became clear, Their home planet was set to the torch, and was stricken from imperial records, bordering on personal insult for the chapters pride in their record keeping, - Penitence Crusade: Their is no official record of a Penitence Crusade being ordered, it may even be self inflicted by the chapter, feeling lost without their home, Or it could be an extension of their punishment by the Ordos Hereticus, However the chapter fights with a new sense of self preservation, for the reason that if their chapter is wiped out, then their records shall die with them, no one will be left to honor the memory of their now nameless home,-I have a touch more, but i feel this is enough of a dump for now,