Talk:Guidance of the Blind

I didn't read it all through, but something came up so I'll comment it right away. First, I liked it. I still don't like the Beor thing you are having with the Abyss Gazers here, but with this story I find it much more justifiable and... reasonable, than with only the articles.

About writing. I would personally enjoy more complex detail describing. I mean, it doesn't need to be hexodescriptive shitload of bullshit, unimportant information, but your writing is quite... I don't know. Straightforward? Not neccesarily a bad thing.

Abbreviations. I guess we can agree that we all know what PDF is, but in a prose using abbreviations is a bit frumpy. Especially in a context such as "planet's PDF", where it turns out "planet's planetary defense forces". Why don't you just call it planetary garrison, planetary troops... I don't know, whatever. In dialogue abbreviations might be cool, because people might use them, but in text not so much. This applies to numbers too. If you have number "4" in your text, write it in letters. So "4" should be "four". "Twohundredfiftyseven" can be written as "257", but with simple numbers words should be preferred. This is not an absolute truth though, just my thoughts. -- Remos talk 17:33, May 24, 2018 (UTC)